Writing- A moment in time

Last week our class had a writing sample. We had to write a recount on anything we wanted in past tense. I decided to write mine on jumping off the Tolaga Bay Wharf. We had 15 minutes to write a plan in our draft and planning books. We then had 30 minutes to write our stories and then another 15 to recraft our writing and fix any mistakes. Our teacher then marked us in different areas of our writing based off the story. The scores we were given are out of six and you can see my scores in the orange pen in the first image, or in the writing rubric below. On the rubric the pink is the level I am at now and the blue is my next level.  

Diorama

Hi :)
This week we had to make a diorama of a scene in our book we are reading, Dark Life. We got the option to do a 2d drawing individually or a 3d diorama in a pair. I made a diorama with Charlie. We based our diorama off a scene in the book where Ty, the main character, and Jemma, a girl Ty met found a wrecked submarine. We were most proud of the painting we did of a window looking out to the bottom of the ocean. Something we found hard and made us not finish to our best standards was our design. I think we made our design a bit too complicated and too hard to make in a 3d form.