Writing- A moment in time

Last week our class had a writing sample. We had to write a recount on anything we wanted in past tense. I decided to write mine on jumping off the Tolaga Bay Wharf. We had 15 minutes to write a plan in our draft and planning books. We then had 30 minutes to write our stories and then another 15 to recraft our writing and fix any mistakes. Our teacher then marked us in different areas of our writing based off the story. The scores we were given are out of six and you can see my scores in the orange pen in the first image, or in the writing rubric below. On the rubric the pink is the level I am at now and the blue is my next level.  

a novel response

hi :)
Today i am writing my blog post about a project we had to do called a novel response. I based mine off a book I once read. Here it is below-

Kawa of Care

Hi! Today I will be writing to you about Kawa of Care and explaining what it is.

The Kawa of Care is about using your chromebook sensibly and properly. Kawa of Care teaches you how to be responsible online and how to have a positive digital footprint. Here is my Kawa of Care poster I made with Kyra and how to write a sensible, helpful comment. 

How to make a successful comment-

1. Start by greeting the person. Say hi, hello, or maybe introduce yourself.
2.  Compliment them! The person might not want to read your comment if it's all negative. You could start by saying I like... or I love how you...
3. If the blog post reminds you of something, make a connection. E.g- If the post was about what book they were reading, you could say if you had read that book before or if you are reading a similar book.
4. Add some more information.
5. Ask a question or answer them if they have asked one.
6. Re-read to see if your comment makes sense
7. Check for punctuation
8. Check with the teacher
9. Publish!